HATE DIALOGUE WITH
GESTURITIS?
Using body
language effectively.
Some of the most ubiquitously used are:
Sighing, grinned, smiled, frowned, shrugging, glaring, sitting,
looking, pausing, chuckling, bolting, smirking, staring, breathed, nodding.
Writers use gestures and body language as
speech tags or as ways to identify the speaker. What you don’t want to do is
bore the reader with them!
It’s easy to critique your writing is by
doing a search of your manuscript for any body language you suspect you’ve overused. A yawn, blink, or grin can be used occasionally, but original phrasing
and fresh observations are always better. Try to use gestures that reveal
something about the character or the situation. A glut of
position-shifting description is not action. It’s fidgeting, and will encourage
a reader to drop your book out of sheer frustration.
When checking your work for gesturitis, study
your usage and ask:
1. Do the gestures add value by deepening characterization?
- If not they’re merely a collection of tics and
fidgets.
2. Have you included any redundancies?
- e.g., “nodding in agreement,” or using a
gesture to describe what the dialogue already mentioned.
3. Whenever possible, use a gesture description
to show what a character is feeling, rather than just state
the emotion.
4. Make every gesture serve a purpose.
5. Use your computer’s search feature to check
for repetitious use of gestures.
As a reader, and I still manage to read a book a week, I hate the use of constant body movement to identify characters
in dialogue. I think the reader wants to know who is speaking, but if the
dialogue is compelling, frequent identifying of the speaker by his name,
followed by “said” is much easier to read.
Dear readers,
I’ve written this post is for both
authors and readers. I’m hoping you readers will comment, letting us know if
you even notice overused gestures. It's possible, the average reader, once
involved in a book he enjoys, will not necessarily be put off by them as long
as the writing in general is good. However, readers are becoming more critical
as many new writers enter the book market and great numbers of them do so too
quickly, overlooking the importance of editing and proofing their writing.
So readers, tell us what you think!
Hope all of you are enjoying your
summer,
Marla
Note:
The term “gesturitis” and some of the commentary on this subject, is from Chris
Roerden’s Don’t Murder Your
Mystery. I highly recommend the book for anyone who writes mysteries,
thrillers or suspense.